Dying/broken/forgiven.... now I begin

Born: 17-06-56....gemini.... monkey
re-born: 3-09-80
born again\found: 14-04-08
other notable dates: 10-03-68; 03-09-87; 23-03-96;
1-05-98; 31-01-02; 5-04-04

Interests: movement, stressed/transgressive embodiment, lived experience (body\space\time\relation)
expression ( word, dance, text, image, story, music, poetics)
learning, yielding......

Hopes for the blog:
offer up the wild intersectedness of lived experience and engage others in creative, expressive, perhaps irreverant, hopefully playful, and respectful encounters....
enact kindness
create moments of pause for disclosure, discovery, stillness

Sunday, February 14, 2010

Punctuation / wetHAIKUdream (ing)



finding an empty
realizing I drank it
all pain is like that

finding: an empty
realizing/ I drank it
all; pain is like that

Finding an empty
realizing. I drank it.
All pain is like that.

finding an empty ....
realizing I drank it
all/ pain is like that

9 comments:

  1. my thanks to Dave at Pics & Poems for the post that got this one going....
    and for those who know me, this is only a remember when.

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  2. Excelent, excelent man, congratulations for that, it shows is for real what you wrote. And I love the repeating self reference, meta-language you also talk.

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  3. Experimentation of the upper quadrant of the grey cells. Stimulating.

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  4. Gadzooks! You and Long Tall with the punctuation...though I will admit that it does flavor each one a bit differently.

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  5. really enjoyed the word play in this. Fab.

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  6. Mariana-- thanks for the sweet comments, I appreciate your enthusiasm
    Jimmy-- glad to hear that this little experiment was a nice massage for the grey matter.... nothing like a punctuation play to get the juices flowing!
    WM-- hah! gadzooks.... I love this word! thanks
    Dave-- glad you enjoyed--thanks for the hook
    Jose ramon-- my Spanish is weak but my Spanish speaking partner is strong....
    Madame-- thank you; I appreciate a compliment from a mistress of the craft!

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  7. The syntax adds a new take to the haiku. Interesting and stimulating.

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  8. Eshuneutics--thanks so much for the visit and the comment. I enjoyed working with form and structure.

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