Dying/broken/forgiven.... now I begin

Born: 17-06-56....gemini.... monkey
re-born: 3-09-80
born again\found: 14-04-08
other notable dates: 10-03-68; 03-09-87; 23-03-96;
1-05-98; 31-01-02; 5-04-04

Interests: movement, stressed/transgressive embodiment, lived experience (body\space\time\relation)
expression ( word, dance, text, image, story, music, poetics)
learning, yielding......

Hopes for the blog:
offer up the wild intersectedness of lived experience and engage others in creative, expressive, perhaps irreverant, hopefully playful, and respectful encounters....
enact kindness
create moments of pause for disclosure, discovery, stillness

Sunday, February 14, 2010

Punctuation / wetHAIKUdream (ing)



finding an empty
realizing I drank it
all pain is like that

finding: an empty
realizing/ I drank it
all; pain is like that

Finding an empty
realizing. I drank it.
All pain is like that.

finding an empty ....
realizing I drank it
all/ pain is like that

10 comments:

  1. my thanks to Dave at Pics & Poems for the post that got this one going....
    and for those who know me, this is only a remember when.

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  2. Excelent, excelent man, congratulations for that, it shows is for real what you wrote. And I love the repeating self reference, meta-language you also talk.

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  3. Experimentation of the upper quadrant of the grey cells. Stimulating.

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  4. Gadzooks! You and Long Tall with the punctuation...though I will admit that it does flavor each one a bit differently.

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  5. ...traigo
    sangre
    de
    la
    tarde
    herida
    en
    la
    mano
    y
    una
    vela
    de
    mi
    corazón
    para
    invitarte
    y
    darte
    este
    alma
    que
    viene
    para
    compartir
    contigo
    tu
    bello
    blog
    con
    un
    ramillete
    de
    oro
    y
    claveles
    dentro...


    desde mis
    HORAS ROTAS
    Y AULA DE PAZ


    TE SIGO TU BLOG




    CON saludos de la luna al
    reflejarse en el mar de la
    poesía...


    AFECTUOSAMENTE


    ESPERO SEAN DE VUESTRO AGRADO EL POST POETIZADO DE CABALLO, LA CONQUISTA DE AMERICA CRISOL Y EL DE CREPUSCULO.

    José
    ramón...

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  6. really enjoyed the word play in this. Fab.

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  7. Mariana-- thanks for the sweet comments, I appreciate your enthusiasm
    Jimmy-- glad to hear that this little experiment was a nice massage for the grey matter.... nothing like a punctuation play to get the juices flowing!
    WM-- hah! gadzooks.... I love this word! thanks
    Dave-- glad you enjoyed--thanks for the hook
    Jose ramon-- my Spanish is weak but my Spanish speaking partner is strong....
    Madame-- thank you; I appreciate a compliment from a mistress of the craft!

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  8. The syntax adds a new take to the haiku. Interesting and stimulating.

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  9. Eshuneutics--thanks so much for the visit and the comment. I enjoyed working with form and structure.

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